Жанр: Лирика: Стихи на иностранных языках Прочтений: 0 Посещений: 2045 Дата публикации: 29.3.2008
The lake of my tears is only your,
The poems of you is getting strong
I’m singing for you and love is so long,
But future’s the dust and nothing more
Dark swan, the bird of my feeling,
Dark swan, the end and beginning,
Dark swan, I’ll always repeating,
Dark swan, this love unforgiving
I’m trying forget what was and what could
And crossing the letter I wanted to send,
These lines like the snakes and the ink like the blood,
The sky like the hole and sun like discord
Dark swan, the bird of my feeling,
Dark swan, the end and beginning,
Dark swan and I’m screaming,
Dark swan those love was forbidden
Remembering joys, forgetting the failure,
We swore and decided be always together
The devils and angels are not very differ,
The hatred’s the ice and love is the fever
With you, your kiss makes me better,
With you, and nothing else matter,
With you, I’m playing with danger,
With you, this love is forever…
Ваше мнение:
not taking into consideration all spelling, grammar and lexical mistakes one can say that the idea of the poem is very nice indeed. still you have to pay more attention to the grammar not to sound ignorant and careless
2008-03-30 01:32:01Иван Правдолюбов
I wouldn't say that the grammar is all that bad (cuz to my mind you can sacrifice grammar constructions to gain rythm), however there are some mistakes in spelling. To my mind the poem (or better say the song) sounds very nice. A very good one, I'd say :)
2009-08-20 17:44:18DarkSwan
i was googling for my nickname and found this song..)) very interesting! but there are so many mistakes... i know english not very good (i'm just studying it at university), but i see them. it prevents to enjoy the poem